Kiicoh

Eh. This story was ok. You have some rhyming patterns in this that I don't like. It makes it seem like you attempted writing a poem with this, failed miserably, ...

Insomniacs reality Night upon night, I lay all alone, Possessed by my thoughts, Unable to let go, I’m haunted from a distance, By what I desire most, Held in discussion ...

Wow. I totally and completely disagree with both of your reviewers so far... Disagreements with your first reviewer: You have some great lines but you ruin it with the constant ...

Wow. I REALLY liked this. Your hand gently ran through my hair, smoothing out my tangled curls. My only thought, to stay still so that your comfort wouldn't stop. My ...

I really enjoyed reading this piece! For the most part, it flows very nicely. Cloudy veil recoils the night The fiery stars with gold alight I don't like how your ...

I enjoyed the First Draft the best. As a reader, the biggest thing i peronally look for is word choice. If the words can flow, and sound intelligent, and of ...

and disappear every remainder of itself. I'm really not sure "disappear" is the best word to use in conjunction with the last line, otherwise, I think you need a comma ...

Contrare to what wickedwonder had to say, I think it's great. I LOVE it. The way it's written is... really cool, for lack of a better word. It almost seems ...

Personally, I don't like it. The repetition is... odd. I think I'd like it more if there were to be a rhyming theme to it. The poem is, well, bland. ...

Good job! Again, make sure you're checking your spelling, grammer, punctuation, etc. before you post. I really like what's happening so far. The main character seems too much of a ...

Removing one hand from my stomach I began feeling around my head. I felt a gash on my forehead, another on on the back of my head, and I felt ...

Reading this reminded me of my best friend's old home life with her dad, which is very sad. Like everyone else said, add some more emotional detail to it. Situations ...

I like your idea :) It seemed really enthusiastic, though. Kind of fake. Almost like you were trying to be a cheerleader for Young Writers Society, which, for some reason, ...

This is really cool! I was trying to remember how the song went as I read, and it goes with it pretty well, from what I remember. I giggled a ...

Woah.... I really like this. It's so creative! As pretty much everyone else said, it was a little all over the place, and didn't make a lot of sense, but ...