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I didn't like how you strayed from your first stanza's rhyming pattern, but other than that, I really liked it. Great job! My favorite part was : Play a faithful ...

WOW. What an amazing picture this creates! I LOVE this. Not like, LOVE. Oh, the beauty! The artistry... GREAT JOB. This sort of reminded me of a part of Hannibal. ...

Oh. My. God. I think I fell in love with you a little bit... My favorite part: I could write about your eyes, like beacons, piercing the fog with such ...

What happened to your pattern? In the first two stanzas, you kind of had an abab rhyming pattern... Sorta lol. "Lied" and "alike" kind of go together, and "pain" and ...

I am lonely , I dont feel loved . Theres a noise around me , o ften a crowd . I stand in the middle of the masses of people ...

I LOVED this poem. All except for one part. You broke your rhyming scheme! Green is the edge of grass, shooting up in spring green is the color of my ...

Oh my god. I LOVED reading this until the end! :( The end disappointed me. "Gone" and "Shone" are spelled similarly, but they don't rhyme!! Other than that, GREAT job. ...

I had to reread your poem to even notice the rhyming pattern (with the exception of the first stanza). Your syllable count is... Odd. I think that's my problem with ...

I don't like your use of "all" and "away". I realize your poem is about running away, but it seems like you could have edited the poem further and replaced ...

I agree with what Snoink was saying about the lack of description of the relationship. You mention your anger, and your hurt emotions, and that the relationship is nothing but ...

This is... Great. Just like everyone else, I loved reading this. Let it go. Just let it go. I can't. I can't let it go. Not again. One more strike ...

I really enjoyed reading this! :) Starting here, it became a little hard to follow. I'm not sure if it's just me, but I had to go back and re ...

Hi! Teardrop here! I'm gonna try and review this before I have to leave for a school dance tonight, sorry if this seems rushed. beause "because" You know," He began ...

Wow. It seems everyone has pretty much beat the crap out of this. I feel obligated to apologize for such reviews, because I found this quite nice. It was quick ...

This was a very beautifully written poem. Normally I'm not one for the dramatic poetry, because I like poems with a ryming scheme. With that said, I don't think I ...