KhardanJakk

Gah! I really do love the names of your people and your cities/towns/etc. I didn't get to read part one, since my laptop decided not to let me see it, ...

Wow! This really was very good! You had no grammar problems, no punctuation problems, and no capitalization problems. I'm impressed. However...some of the wording messed up the flow of the ...

Wow...this is the best story I have EVER read. xD! But now time for me to review it semi-seriously. The assassin crouched in a field where the moon was bright ...

You mean well, but your making it worse. Crushing me with sympathy, is turning this pain into a curse. "Your" should be "you're." :) My heart yearns, for a simple ...

Beep. Beep. It was time, I had hoped they couldn't find me. I guess it was inevitable my ship had recklessly crashed into a house on Earth. I was running ...

Aw, man, this was pretty epic xD! I was pretty much scanning for grammer, punctuation, and spelling mistakes (ha, yeah, I'm a Nazi for that stuff), and amazingly enough I ...

You had some punctuation errors, but other than that...I literally wanted to cry. It's so sad, but so well-written and beautiful! The "catching breath like fireflies" was really great--I could ...

There was some really good imagery in here; nice work! I'm going to comment on some of the things here, so my stuff will be bold and in red from ...

Oh, wow! I've been learning about this in American History, so I know what you're talking about here (Jamestown was very muggy, swampy, and infested with insects. I do agree ...

You reviewed my own works, so I'm deciding to come and review yours! Sort of like an eye for an eye, eh? Anyhoo... My birth was marked with sorrow. I ...