Katharsis

Above him shimmered a battle-worn face, whose hoarse lips trembled and panted deeply. The 'whose' here seems out of place, I would rephrase this to indicate 'his lips'. “Someone call ...

First of all, your first chapter is under the name: "Path of the Strider: The Immortal". This is: "Path of the Strider: The Immortal s ". Chapter One Part II ...

between them all lay [s]baron[/s] barren dust heaps Look through the reviews you've acquired and adjust your piece accordingly. Most of the corrections I would have made have already been ...

I'm impressed. Do some more spacing, make the name of your MC consistent and fix some of the errors that have been pointed out and it's fine with me. You ...

I feel like you wrote this for yourself. I feel nothing when reading this - you should think carefully about what affect you want to have on the reader before ...

A Walk through the Park Chadwick Someone is watching me! Sam walked a little faster as he turned the corner. Oops Sam thought as he ran right into a short ...

The final exams were coming up and he need ed to get the best score in his class. It was early in the morning and Sota was about to get ...

Put a blank line between your paragraphs! Other than that, I love it. There's so little for me to critique in grammar and spelling - it makes me warm and ...

Chapter 11 Austins Love Child My Dear Fans, Austin Rosstern blogging again about one of my famous interesting days. Believe me, this one takes the cake. This morning, after I ...

“Tonight on Nightline, it was an ordinary morning at Ashville College until the first shot was fired, killing the school’s Principal, Mr. Mike Saunders. We bring you details of the ...

If you just want my overall note on this, scroll to the bottom. It's long. (please help me improve.) That's what I like to hear. Lucius Cain, a soldier in ...

the disturbing noise was unnoticed to Mariah If it's unnoticed, then it can't really be disturbing, can it... Oooh. Trippy. It seems redundant to declare it both disturbing and then ...

The sun was a magestic majestic yellow, like the lion's mane. The graceful Hibiscus, beautiful in its many colors. The breath-taking whites, pinks, reds, and yellows. Perfect in every way, ...

Once all the dogs were dead and the virus could only be passed by touching the bodies, the man exited the room, across three halls and then out to the ...