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Oh my GOD... Short, elegant, humerous, beautiful. I ENVY YOUR TALENT! Tell me I'm beautiful, that was the best part... I mean, all the words... they were pretty... I liked ...

I'm sure this is a great story...but its red, no capitalization, not enough punctation, no paragraphs. i cannot read one long, uncapitalized, RED story. i know i know im probably ...

His tears numbered more than the massive multitude of icy raindrops pouring from the sky. His fists clenched, his cheeks numb, and his heart throbbing, he wep t under the ...

I'm far too lazy to critique this simply because I find it extraordinary! So instead, I'll just comment on what I liked. The dialogue was believable and as Cassandra said, ...

Alarms blared and red lights flashed on and off in what seemed like a government facility of some type. A group of heavily armed soldiers ran down the long corridors, ...

Wow-this floored me. Great, great job. Awesomeness! :D yup i kinda skipped part of it because its a solid block of text, tho spacings would be good

Ok, I gotta say, this was really well done--great word choices and smooth reading, as Bob said. Really my only beef with this is the sheer mass of words on ...

I liked it. The first two lines flowed really well: Floating through the space of life; Follow the yellow brick road. The rhythm here is good, but Holding hands with ...

Duskglimmer said that, Who is Tammy? You mention, Beck and Stacy, but I could find reference for any other girl except for the last line of the prologue. It just ...

During the beginning, I couldn't see who the narrator was, since it just said that I’m standing and I swear that I can smell But otherwise it was great. I ...

Kind of a hard read... my mind was way overloaded with information. Either simplify it or make it llonger. Sorry, i hate being so blunt, but your writing needs a ...

cool. i luv romantic fic, but dont tell Zelithan/zelithon, or shell bug the crap out of me at school :lol: :lots_hearts: :love: :hearts_eyes: :love: :lots_hearts:

Cats are awesome, but they can sometimes be a handful (I own two feisty cats and a 100 lb part-doberman...I speak from experience) Howeever, they sometimes remind me of this ...

I absolutewly, totally am in LOVRE with the redwall series!!!!! I started them a while ago, but i sitll luv 'em! they are the absoule BEWST!!! I am right now ...