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Razzleberry

Ah finally something I can enjoy

Hi Fixed! Well, that was an interesting article, where's the poem? There's no imagery, at all. I'm pretty sure none of us can imagine a baby being dropped from a ...

Hi! I think this is the second piece of yours I'm at >.> First I'll start by being honest and found this vaguely amusing. All around me there is writing ...

Hi Hib! Well, finally someone has incorporated some sort of substantial imagery. I'm bordering on having my brain explode from the lack of it. So thank you for that. You ...

Alright, what are we getting, milk and tomatoes? Seriously, this is a grocery list of wants/feelings. I want this, I want to feel that. Blahblahblah. It gets dull really quickly. ...

So basically, in 33 lines you basically say: I have to see you again. x3 I'd hope that in 33 lines you'd get a much more powerful message instead of ...

Hi Screamandshout! I had a review ready for this last night, but I fell asleep before I could post it. I decided to rewrite the review instead of giving you ...

Hi there Coter, your repetition it gets dulls. your repetition is mostly likely fruitless. ^See, it's not as good as it seems. You can definitely making stanzas about the contrasting ...

Hi, The whole "I miss you" is not working. Same with the general cliche that is this poem. It reeks teenge angst/ heart broken "Ohmygoshican'tlivewithoutyou" kind of thing. My question ...

This is very Ludo style poem. The whole blood, sin and disease thing isn't working, for anyone. It's all very cliche. One thing is that you're making it very choppy ...

Alright Eddie. Here I go: Overall this is cliche. But it gives me a good idea. So it's like a relationship poem, or a poem about a car accident. Neither ...

I still can't get over the whole Neopets Faerie Cloud feel to this entire poem. The land of the faeries is a pastel dream of purple and pink each food ...

Alrighty. There is a magnificent "Check Spelling" option in the top right corner of the submitting box. It avoids any silly (and highly irritating typos). Please remember that having a ...

Guh, where to begin? Rain is depression, when you stand in it for to long then you just stay depressed Rain is depressing? Okay. Why is it depressing? How does ...