Kalliope

Hey shanan I agree with the other posts that this needs alot of work. SeraphTree and Colleen said the things that popped into my mind emidiatly. Basicaly you need to ...

Scientology, eh? I liked the way you made Debbie seem really nice and everything and then in the end she turned out to be ice-cold. The story describes a very ...

I loved this. I've never had such a great loss in my life, but I've watched people losing a lot. Exspecially this year. In your poem you put into words, ...

Wow. This is good. It's true, I love the way you wrote it, the reader can see the girl, it is not obvious at all and I am so greatful ...

Sounds neat, but I'd need to read more to critique it properly. I agree with Arya about the everything-part. Not much more I can say. If you'd like me to ...

I agree that it is not unique and a little too cliché in some places, but I think all in all it's okay. Anyway there are a few things I ...

Hey, I like this. It has a nice flow to it and you make your point. Remember the time when we were younger? And we got along so well as ...

This is really beautiful. You seem to paint pictures in the air with your words. Changing views makes it very real and the listener/reader can feel the bitter-sweetness of the ...

WOW!! I am truly impressed. I'm quite new here, but I've already seen quite an amount of lyrics and this is absolutely the best one!! I mght post one of ...

You have a nice smoothe way of writing, so I think you should definetly finish this, but I think you should repeat yourself a little less and put more new ...

I like the idea of the song and you have a very straight forward way in telling what you think, which is good. But I agree with Lynlyn that it ...

I really liked this one! It has a nice flow and makes your message (I completly agree with you.) very clear. I can very well imagine it as a rap. ...