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Abigail has already pointed out the spelling errors, so I won't repeat them. However, I do wonder why certain words (like Run) are capitalized at seeming random. For a tribute, ...

"Decline" is repeated in the second line. It was too repetitive. I suggest rephrasing the poem so that there is no need to repeat "decline". "Whether slow and slipping, passing ...

The first stanza was great. The rest of the poem, not so good. The sudden jump from "she" to "I" needs more of a visual cue. Adding in a section ...

First thing I wondered: why are there chapter headings? Those are more features of a story than an essay. *name of public school removed to protect privacy* Next time, I ...

In one way or another, it has somehow affected you too . The "too" is redundant. Whether it was something drastic like losing your job (comma) or something not so ...

Alright. This poem can be summed up in one word, and that word is confusing. Especially near the end. You've got too much going on at once, and no clear ...

You have a great story here, but (and it's a big but) it's hidden and almost ruined beneath the inconsistent rhyme and the bland imagery. The punctuation also doesn't help ...

Just the gist is enough! In a poem as short as this, every spelling mistake you make, even if it's just one, is extremely noticeable. It never hurts to check ...

Hello there. Rosey was quite thorough with the length and imagery, so I shall be focusing on one aspect of poetry I feel is particularly essential: punctuation. Now, normally a ...

Punctuation. You need it. Right around the "I'm bored" line, my brain shut down and stopped trying to comprehend this poem. A lot of this was due to the lack ...

The one issue I had with this poem was the irregularity of the punctuation. You seem to have an aversion to periods, and while I can understand why you'd leave ...

I would just like to point out that you have a typo in the title: "LIfe". You might want to fix that and keep an eye out for similar mistakes ...

525, 600 There should be no space after the comma. 525600 is one number; not 525 and 600, which is what the space after the comma makes it seem like ...

Nitpicks! cuddle-fish It's cuttlefish, fool! Though cuttlefish are uncannily cuddly... "Polly want a cracker," Should be enclosed in single quotes as they're quotations within quotations. Hooray for n

You switch referring to to the person who taught the narrator the lesson from "you" to "he" in the second stanza. That really threw me off. I suggest just referring ...