Kale

Before I get into the review proper, a couple of things: Why is there a prologue in the first place? Is it absolutely necessary to understand the story? If so, ...

Quite honestly, I don't know what to make of this, and not in the good way. What were you trying to say with this? Your message is completely scattered into ...

waiting for the haunting hum of the heart’s last gasp. "Gasp" and "hum" don't quite mesh to my ear or mind. Gasps are so much harsher than hums, which are ...

A Peep , the candy of Spring, is the one candy that can wind up stuffed between couch cushions or (I think this works better and makes for easier understanding ...

as my mother could not determine a more suitable place for her to bear her first child. I wish not to know a day in which I do not feel ...

I am loopy from a combination of a whole lot of things like pain and lack of sleep. You have been warned. ignoring the obnoxious come-ons of a certain noxious ...

The rhythm in this was quite off. For example, in this stanza: But only to burst, On my pearly whites, Draining down my throat, Gone like the sun, at night. ...

I have missed your fiction so much (I prefer it over your poetry, truthfully), words fail to describe the glee I felt when I came across this piece. And then ...

There was a truce in your hands, nails blue, soothing my inflamed skull while snow drift conversations blew into my eyes. This stanza caught my eye right away, and I ...

Hey there, and welcome to YWS! Before I begin my review, I'd like to point out that the formatting need some fixing. Since YWS has a plain-text editor, you'll have ...

As classy and silent have already mentioned, the character's self-castigation and guilt felt a bit repetitive because there was so much, and it wasn't until almost halfway that you revealed ...

You might be interested to learn (if you didn't already know) that the four temperaments — Sanguine, Choleric, Melancholic, and Phlegmatic — have been around for a very long time, ...

Fellow Nudibranch! I hail you! And send a review your way in the glorious name of our team. ;P --- Normally when I point out spacing, I'm telling folks that ...

This started off quite good — you had a definite rhythm and the rhymes didn't feel forced — but then you lost the flow and it became obvious that the ...

I have to agree with Rascalover — this felt entirely too disjointed, and there was nothing in each and every part that said "describing a saguaro". In particular, in one ...