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She lived. Tense shift. They can be used effectively for emphasis, but this is just jarring and doesn't make sense, especially since it causes this line to fight with the ...

There is a lot about this poem that I want to like, but at the same time, there's a lot about this poem that just feels off. Slip past the ...

I see! I find this new for me, I thought it means "alone". Not quite. "Alone" is a state of being, while "sole" is a description of a state. "Sole" ...

Other Poetry might be a better section. Most people are unfamiliar with prose poems (which is what yours appears to be), and the Other Poetry section is typically where the ...

To be honest, while this isn't bad, it's rather bland. A lot of it has to do with the language, but also with the images. In the case of the ...

I quite liked this poem for how brief it was, though there are a few things I think could use some tweaking. Right now, the first two lines are a ...

I noticed a couple of oddities with regards to your firearm descriptions, so I'll be focusing on those. It was a Mosin Nagant M1891/30 PU The first time I saw ...

We were greeted by the whistles of smog. Trains steamed memories into fog I am really not liking the "fog" there. It feels too repetitious with "smog", and it just ...

you sweard you couldn't fight it. Should be "swore". Dictionaries are lovely, lovely things, and they have information on a word's tenses, usage, and history, in addition to what it ...

And just when I feel as if I'm about to burst (comma) the tapping starts again. And then... well... and then I'm just scared again. This sentence struck me as ...

and the awards to which you are bestowed This reads like you are awarded to the award, which is backwards. Writing "and the awards bestowed upon you" is more correct, ...

Laughing in our boats of roses and violets. Waves push us ashore. The first period should be a comma or perhaps a dash, otherwise it reads like the first two ...

However, it is often used in biology and scientific terms to mean "opposite." For example: catabolism is a metabolic process opposite to another....I think anabolism? Not sure though. Not quite. ...

There is this inexplicable joy That I get Each time I try to employ To or intelligently detect Rhyming is more than just ending lines with words that rhyme. Rhyming ...

Dripping with Purell. Interesting image. My only quibble would be that not everyone knows that Purell is a brand of hand sanitizer, so you risk this image going over some ...