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The punctuation was very odd. It made it difficult for me to tell where one thought started and a new one began. If this was your intention, I suggest refining ...

Not my idea of funny. I like my humor a bit more sophisticated. :P Humor aside, the rhyme scheme sounded natural and was consistent, which was a definite plus. Unfortunately, ...

Hey there Brown Eyed Girl. Kat covered the punctuation pretty well, so I won't go over it. You probably should add some punctuation, though. Punctuation signals to the reader "this ...

The first poem was very cute made me laugh. I have no real crits for it. The second poem, on the other hand, has a very irregular rhythm. Also, the ...

... You need to watch your punctuation, rhyme scheme, syllable count, and line length. Poems, if you chose to follow punctuation conventions, are punctuated the same as regular sentences. Changing ...

Saluted your commander. Learnt never to surrender. Never doubting that hope would always/ever reign.... This evens up the length of this stanza with the next; pretty important considering that they ...

Comments and suggestions will be in orange, corrections in red. Sadness. This would work better as a completely separate stanza. It gives it more emphasis. The burning sensation trite; be ...

My comments and suggestions shall be in orange. Corrections will be in red. So many unfinished lines, Black scrawls that sit Above blank pages, Contrasting so sharply Against that seemingly ...

First off, I see spelling mistakes. You seem to be able to find them yourself, so I won't point them out. If only all Life dies, then those with no ...

For someone who doesn't care about grammar, you did a pretty good job with following the rules. :P This story has a lot of potential. The basic plot isn't all ...

Aside from what the other two have mentioned, there are a couple things I'd like to add. First off, when you do describe things (like the prince's shield), it is ...

Hello Hippie. Remember me? :P Have you braced yourself? Good. Because I didn't find much. :D In fact, I only have a couple of quibbles. “Arthur are you alright ? ...

This definitely has a lot of potential, and I enjoyed reading, especially how you describe the goddess. :3 You just need to smooth out a couple wrinkles. For instance, the ...

Hi there! I'm Kyllorac (though you can call me Kyll or Kylie), and I'll be reviewing you today. Seeing as how you're new, I'm not sure you're aware that it's ...

Sorry this is so late. I was sick, and then I had the entire review typed up but lost it after accidentally pressing the back button... Blood drips slowly into ...