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Re: Love II (Rebellion)
I'm really enjoying this series of poems. It's a cool idea, and all your poems are gorgeously written. I read this last night, and since I was in that half-tired ...
Jan 11, 2011 -
Re: Starlight
But I like imagery! And I like all your poems. And I love this one. This actually might be one of my new favorites. Okay. First stanza: gorgeous. Coral shovels, ...
Jan 8, 2011 -
Re: The Bedside Angel
I really love this poem; especially "the hand of an angel" and "she'll be the angel that makes you her lord." Just one grammar note: With her touch, the hunger ...
Jan 7, 2011 -
Re: Love I (Decay)
I love this. I love this so much. Your word choice and imagery are gorgeous. Bravo. Here's my nitpick: my dreams leave me crying and clawing at the sweat-soaked pillows. ...
Jan 6, 2011 -
Re: Deleted 6
This is lovely. I love this. I love its complexity--I have to keep going back and re-reading, but I feel like I'm seeing different aspects of the poem each time. ...
Jan 5, 2011 -
Re: Jumbled
Good! Another poem! I love that your words are broken and stained, I love the line break between "jumbled" and "like puzzle pieces". I think you might want to play ...
Jan 3, 2011 -
Re: Hollow Bones
I love your poetry. I love the style of this, and your imagery, and the subject, and the twist on the subject. The first stanza is gorgeous: I think "cruelly" ...
Dec 31, 2010 -
Re: Deleted 4
I love this short-short story (and I think that's really what it is--there's not really a plot, but things happen) and I love your writing style. I'm a huge fan ...
Dec 31, 2010 -
Re: Torture- Excerpt from my Novel.
This was very good, and very disturbing, which is also good. I only have one point. You said: "Chuckling happily, I watched him running a finger along the most recent ...
Dec 30, 2010 -
Re: Turn 2: Little Grey Men
Hello again! (I hope this is the right "turn" to correct.) I really liked getting to hear things from Kaito's point of view. He is really different from Abigail, so ...
Dec 30, 2010 -
Re: His Love For Lady Adrienne
I love this poem! It really reminds me of the epic poems they used to tell waybackwhen, and I like how this really does tell a story. Just a few ...
Dec 29, 2010 -
Re: (unnamed)
Please, please, please don't stop writing poetry. This is brilliant. I love the language, and the halting style--it's good on the page, and when you read it out loud it's ...
Dec 29, 2010 -
Re: Turn 1: The First Whispers
Oh wow. I really, really liked this! I love the idea of everyone falling asleep and getting wrapped up by spiders except for the now mutants, and I love the ...
Dec 28, 2010 -
Re: Brightness
Hello there! I really loved this poem--I think you avoid cheesy with the last two stanzas, so no worries. But before I get ahead of myself.. If I'm reading and ...
Dec 28, 2010 -
Re: The Spirit and the Fool
This was very good! It did keep me interested, and it did keep me guessing until the end. I thought it was interesting how he spent all of his life ...
Dec 28, 2010
