Kafkaescence

I suppose that at this point it is time to ask myself, How do you do it? You are a very adroit poet. Here is my complete edit: This sky ...

This is a most interesting poem. I enjoyed seeing how your obviously carefully chosen words established the tense atmosphere. Here is my complete edit: There is something mechanical about it ...

Again, I enjoyed reading this. Personally, I did not think this was your very best work, but all of your writings are above average, so that's nothing much to worry ...

This is a very nice piece, Ear. It is not so much the imagery as the feeling that you produce throughout part one, two, and three that makes it so ...

She covers her eyes and avoids to see. "Avoids to see" is not correctly stated. She whispers his name in dreams in her sleep. Try to avoid the double "in," ...

Well, here I am again. Perhaps the most incredible thing about your writing is the ideas. Death as a character, living memories...who knows where you get this kind of stuff, ...

Hey Ranger! I finally got to reviewing your work, and I'm glad I did. The atmosphere you developed was a bit informal, a bit scary, a bit mysterious. But the ...

First things first, welcome. I think you'll find it enjoyable here. Okay, now to the poem. I really just could not picture this "night shadow." You do a lot of ...

Your style of poetry is so unique, so beautifully crafted. I can't help but like this. You establish such a strong, emotional atmosphere. I have but a few small suggestions: ...

I enjoyed reading this, but I've got to agree with Paul. Is this a song? Or is it a poem? It seems like it is something in between. The thing ...

Eyes briefly meeting Hands sliding down my back My heart pulsing rapidly This angle of attack Lips touching abrasively Bodies demanding passion Words whispered with desire And meaningful passion You ...

Oh, beautiful. Crafted with the finest words. Consider my suggestions: Light screams from your eyes, "Light?" Hmm. Somehow I cannot picture this. Replace it with an emotion; a strong one, ...

This is one of those poems that are able to be both poetic and straightforward. I liked it. It was understandable. I have some critique, though, that I would like ...

This is short and sweet. I have no problem with the imagery, and you maintain the general feeling of concern throughout. Here are some small critiques of mine: “I cannot ...

This was a good read. You do a fairly good job with the rhyming, which I will soon discuss. Mother, Do do you know what I see in you? A ...