Justagirl

Aaaaw, this is so sweet! You have a really good piece here. I didn't see any grammatical mistakes and you tell the story well ;) But there are a couple ...

Tears submerged Lois’ eyes when he woke up that morning. This is the time. H e thought. Memories filled his mind; of friends, family, and identity. Now he had to ...

And ignore the " Please forgive me. " Wow, great poem. Luckily, I saw only one grammatical mistake (*phew*), so, good job on that :) You had great emotion in ...

This is a really great poem. Your imagery is really great and you have a great rhyme scheme (I can't ryhme for my life so, congrats on being able to). ...

This is a pretty good poem :) You have ok flow in it and the emotion is really great. You could use some imagery but you don't really need to. ...

Awesome poem. Although what Ignatius said is true I still like it a lot. There was great emotion and the flow was wonderful. I think the only thing you could ...

Wow, great poem. The emotion is really awesome and your flow is just perfect. Your imagery is pretty good but maybe a few more emotion bits would make it better. ...

It seems Im doing my best work before I go to sleep. I jotted this one down before I hit the hay last night, I revised it a tiny bit ...

We laugh and smile, we cry and feel sad, This is a good poem. You have a good amount of emotion in it but it lacks flow. Luckily the whole ...

Wow, this is really great. The only thing that interrupts it's flow is... To smoothly flowing, This part. The 'to' in this interrupts flow of the rest of it. Otherwise ...

Great emotion in this one :) This really needs better flow though. I have lots of poems that, when I wrote them, I had so much emotion in me that ...

I laughed a little. “Sure, Nudge …let’s go. Remember, stay alert guys.” Mmm…Mexican food, I have to say, i s awesome. We had to keep passing each other napkins , ...

LOL! Um... Harry's mother is dead - how can Snape be spending time with her? Anywyas, once again, everyone else has pointed out the grammatical errors so I shall point ...

Since everyone else has already pointed out all the grammar mistakes I'll point out the parts I like... :) "What does it look like i'm doing, i'm taking Bella for ...

Lol, Since you said not to say anything about the grammar - I won't. I will just congratulate you. This was actually, genuinely funny :). I am now going to ...