Juniper

So as I was there thinking as i was about to get ran over by a red truck in popular Los Angeles, California. (This confuses me much; drop the "As" ...

Chapter Eight Taking Down Ruby “Madeline, are you absolutely sure Ruby is back (?) ” Sarah said in a serious, half-scared voice. “Sarah, did you not just see me have ...

Here is the next chapter. It isn't very long and may be a little rough. Any harsh critiques are always welcome and I hope you enjoy it!! ----------------------------------------------- Chapter Two ...

Jared! Wow I am impressed! Description was great. A bit awkward at first, and I hadn't an idea that they were being executed. I have to say, either you've watched ...

Who cares that this doesn't rhyme and if you have a boring voice like I do, this can't really be sang along to?! This was downright amusing, especially the halloween ...

(Before I begin being cruel to you about where you made a slight error, let me congratulate you on portraying the time setting so well! Incredibly done! I could never ...

*Author's note* Italics are like an echo, repeating the last few words of the last line. (Okie, sorry to critique something thats so old, but I couldnt resist. Anyway, he ...

I've written my five entries for Cal's contest! I need as much help as I can get with all of them, especially the second one. - 026. Lurk I held ...

Yay! Alright, I just read all of this and it rocks!! There were a few errors, but Ashley already pointed them out (thanks ash and bares teeth at her for ...

Wow! This is one of the most interesting essays I've read in a long time! And this is true? Wow, that must've been an extremely scary incident to go through. ...

Hmmm... The storyline isn't clear. It's hard to tell the setting or what the story is about. It's mostly dialog and very little bit of description. I think you need ...

Wow, that was... amazing. I like it, well written, few things could be better, and somewhat vague point to it, but it is pretty good. The only thing I would ...

This was hysterically funny! I love it when people add on or put a twist to fairy tales. This was so funny, because it kind of shows that Prince Charming ...

Two thumbs up! I loved it! I love how you described the voices in her head, and the smell of Bastians shirt. The names brought a unique twist to the ...

As many people before me have said, i haven't found anything wrong with this piece. It was down right brilliant, although i found it somewhat too dead-ish for my taste ...