Junel

Hey, good job! Negative So it would make this quite a bit easier to read and understand is you separated each stanza from each other. Positive You use a strong ...

Hey, good job again! Sadly I have found quite a few grammatical errors some quite hilarious by the way. fell to the ground, trashing Yeah I'm pretty sure you meant ...

Hey, first off good job! Second why you wrote this would be an interest in story in itself. Not that this wasn't interesting, but it deffinetly was strange. I can't ...

Hey, fist off Great job! So like you even stated at the end it could use a little editing because part are choopy. Sometimes it helps to think over it ...

Hey, first off Great job! Or a while, more silence I don't know if this is just me or its meant to be this way, but this seems like a ...

Hey, this is so amazing! I love the way you used the perpective is little Suzanna instead of third person or her when she was older. Some people find the ...

Hey, this is really cool. When I first saw your title I was so utterly confused that I just had to click on it. What I found is amazing. They ...

Hey, Great job! This was extremely entertaining. I also enjoys the bits of logic in it exspeacially the last but about knowing who had hurt him wasn't going to make ...

Great job, I really enjoyed reading this even though I don't love or even read poetry that often. I loved the way to tried an succeeded may I say to ...

Hey, great job! You have an interesting way of writing and it cool, but it can become confusing for the reader. The way you switch from third to first makes ...

Hey, great job! So first of all there were quite a lot of grammatical errors through out the story below are just a few I found in the beginning after ...

Hey, this is really amazing! You will have to tell me when you put the next part out because I definitely want to continue reading this myself. I don't have ...

Hey, I loved this chapter especially the cliff hanger ending. So first off the main section I had any problem with was when they found the papers. It was just ...

Hey, great job from the first sentence I was immediately pulled in. The little bits of humor were extremely entertaining and I loved your references to different shows and such. ...

First of all this is really great. The way that you are able to connect with the reader so well is amazing. That is not always easy. Your rhyming is ...