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Um...

Oh good lord I know what you saying ;)

Thanks! Tried to do a quick fix with the things you mentioned! Hope they flow a little better. Smithy was my favorite character too, I'm honestly kind of considering a ...

Thanks so much Lavvie! I'll try to work on the things you mentioned!

how is tasteless? is pigeon. pigeon taste like chicken.

I've tried reviewing this chapter four times now. It always gets me stuck. I don't have anything to say. My brain is stuck in a sludge. Forgive me.

Why must we live in a civilization that scrutinize everything you ever do Because somewhere there’s a girl who cries herself to sleep, A boy who’s afraid to be weak ...

Pooooooooooooooooooooooooop. That's all I have to say.

Thanks for this! This brightened up my day!

I'm not saying it's bad, I can name two bullies who were one dimensional that were great fun. (Draco Malfoy, Ambrose Jakis)

:)

Well, the Last of Us is a totally unoriginal story, but it's still great. What I was trying to say was I think a story that feels like a ripoff ...

You're very welcome. :)

Blank. (I tried to make what I wanted to say coherent, but it didn't work out. So here it is.)

And once again I'm back. Steve is an odd tendency I have to point out my own faults so people don't mock me for it. (Way to leave that out ...