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Ive read them all. He's an amazing writer and the Wheel of Time, to me at least, doesnt seem repetitive. I love how he plays with the characters putting them ...

Well, this is certainly different. I like it, the whole idea of the story is very good. I will, however, say that the constant breaks and paragraphs get annoying. The ...

I'll gladly critique this work...once its properly set out. Use the pre button properly. Every time you want a space or a break between sentences/paragraphs, highlight that part and click ...

This was extremely well written and pardon me for saying so, wasted on Romance. You could do so much more and so much better than Romance. But anyway thats your ...

YOur story needed severe editing so I went ahead and did it; I hope you don't mind. Stop putting spaces before full stops and commas. [pre] The short fat goblin ...

There's a lot you could of done with the Kings betrayal; a lot of intrigue you could of woven. However you have odd course, thats for sure. I guess I'll ...

You know I had a whole critique summed up in my head...but everything I wanted to say has benn covered by fishr, so I'll just second what she said; it ...

Small grammatic errors, I shall point out. I’ve heard you like this place? Why freak?’ Why, Freak? The boy looked to the floor of the car as it spend down ...

Is this all there is?? Even that girl on that nameless street. Even the girl on the nameless street. By using 'that' your making out as if the reader knows ...

Hmmm, this story is highly, highly reminiscent of a world in Philip Pullman's The Dark Materials; The amber spyglass, the Norhtern Sky lights etc etc. Hopefully, the next part will ...

Im liking what Ive read so far, but I also think there's room for improvement. Firstly the ending is strange, I dont think it should be ended with dialogue. Maybe ...

You need spaces between all the dialogue. It looks like one unbroken piece of text, which isnt pretty. Also, whats the point/plot m'dear? Dont get me wrong, its nicely done ...

there are some little grammatical errors, nothing that dramatically effects the story. But still... "Come here and next to me Mum, and sit next to me. for the vision to ...

Wow, wow and double wow. Now that is a nice piece of work, I mean truly well done. Question though, why is it mid-story? Why not start at the beginning? ...

Sweat glistened her brow Sweat glistened on her brow. This seemed to upon the men's minds to be upon. Otherwise it is as per usual very, very good.