Jericho

Thank you once again! To clarify, the reason why I don't use quotation marks around Seven's thoughts is because it would interrupt the flow of her narration. If I did ...

Thank you for your review. I have little to respond to on this (though I am taking personal notes), except that Seven...well, she isn't much of a likable character come ...

Thank you for your review; I apologize for my delay in responding. As for the direction the story is going, I already have that (loosely) planned out. Seven's initial arrival ...

Thank you for your review. To explain, this is not the full first chapter, only the first scene. The main plot itself is an undercurrent in the first and second ...

Ah, thank you on the grammar aspect first of all - I hadn't been aware of those issues. On the other aspect... I know this isn't the best beginning. It ...

Ah, what I mean by "I have no stake" is that I don't feel I have much understanding of who Alexandria is, and what I do understand is "generic partying ...

Ah, I see that you fixed your formatting while I was typing! It's very much easier to read now; my apologies for pointing it out, but I was unaware of ...

Ah, I thought I would drop in as I saw some confusion about a word, so I asked my good friend, Google: dignity noun - the state or quality of ...

Ah, on the topic of Ella being a woman - she doesn't like being called a 'girl', because she thinks it's undermining her based on her age/experience. She's currently providing ...

Ah, yes. One of the things I have trouble with is knowing how soon to start the plot. Personally, I enjoy doing a teensy bit more worldbuilding before launching into ...

Thank you for your feedback on the piece; it's very appreciated! As for why Hanna is so nervous, it's because she has bad anxiety and something else on her mind ...

For me, a "standard" hook is more along the lines of in medias res (starting in the middle of the action) or a dialogue opening, or something specifically calculated to ...

Ahhh, thank you very much for this review! I will definitely keep this in mind when I come back to this scene for editing -- and I hope the rest ...

No problem! A fresh pair of eyes is always good when it comes to editing. I would honestly say to finish and then edit, because you have no clue what ...