Jennafina

Damn her is the last line? I like it! its funny.

Yes, me too, but its not too late. They can still post. *Makes puppy eyes at whoevers looking* lol

I like how each Isle has its own little story. Everything really fits.

hmmm. I was rather hopeing for Saundra's dareing escape, so the end seames like a let down, but thats just me.

I dont really get it, and it repeats its self a little to much with the what is. Its a good start though, you just might want to bulid up ...

Thats awesome!!! It really flows and I like how parts of it rhime a bit. I wish I could here the tune.

hmmm.. Religiousness :p I like it though, cool how you can use the word doth and not make it sound cheesy. It flows well too.

The idea is really clever to put every other line in parenthasies (sp). I like how the normal lines rhime with eachother.

Wow, thats cool! I like how it tells little peices of a story.

whats s*n mean? Is it some abreviation?

Wow, thats cool, I like the quiet sence of suspence. It has atmosphere.. :)

awww.. Thats sweet.. Its light and happy and cute.. Nice!

I really liked everything apart from the mention of zombies.. It sounds kind of cheapy. Perhaps you could use a different word.. Apart from that though, it rocks!

you could call it The Blue Danube Waltz.. Or not, perhaps its to irelevent. Yah.. Sorry thats all i have.

I agree with him^^^^^ It kindof repeats its self though.. Keep going!!!