Jashael

Hey, Amsivana! Jash here for a rather quick review. But first! Nitpicks! I am Mrs. Talwar, a 34 year old married housewife. There should be hyphens between "34" and "year," ...

Hi, godlypopo! Jash here for a quick review. Without a word to and from. This is a really good line. I like this! It might seem lacking at first read, ...

Hey, Biluata! Some fine poem you got there. One of my favorite parts was when you repeated the first line to be elaborated a few stanzas later. The parts starting ...

Hey, Redbox275! Jash here for a quick review. Per request, I shall comment on grammar, the overall quality of the story, and characterization. But first! Let me nitpick a bit ...

Hi, whoahhitherepal! Three things first: 1. I'm not very fond of the two exclamation points at the end of the Yous. I think one exclamation would suffice. Or even without ...

Hey, VegasLights! This is an "okay" read, but I think it could be better. I think you can add more poetic devices to it to add some "spice." Try and ...

Hey, PastelSlushie! (I really like your name.) Jash here for a rather quick review. I'll start with pinpointing certain sentences or lines that I find awkward or flawed. Take note ...

Hi, Aley! I was just stalking the poetry and happened to stumble upon your work. I must say this is amazing. I adore its flow - for me it seemed ...

Hi, Rascalover. Your opening is pretty strong. I like the opening dialogue and the brevity of the introduction of the story. I do agree with Zoom regarding the ending; it ...

Hello! Before I start, I wish to tell you that I do not like the format. I can take italics, but I really wish you hadn't put everything in bold. ...

Hi! Thanks for reviewing my song I want to give back the favor. : ) A few nitcpiks: "mahy" is "many". When trying to use BBcode, you should use brackets. ...

I love this poem, alliyah. Your thoughts were simply but well portrayed. I can relate to it (at some point) and I'm sure a lot of girls out there can, ...

Hello, Razcoon! I think this is really cute. It's simple, but the nice kind of "simple" that means a lot of people can probably relate to it, which is really ...

So, as you requested, I will overlook the typos. But I think I found a nitpick: ...and cooked for my roommates and I. Me. I also would suggest spelling out ...

Hello, LifeUnknown! I'm Jash, and I'm here to review your song. A few nitpicks: You're ready to let go you're in it's another... more than they use too Its all ...