Jas

Hey, This was a gorgeous read. I literally, have nothing to critique. which is a first for me. Just a tinnnnnny suggestion, make this longer and put it in Romantic ...

Hey, The rhyme was a bit simple but still the flow was pretty good, even though it was choppy. I liked the message, it was very clear and blunt. This ...

Hey, So I made the mistake of not reading the AN before reading the poem, which is why I spent five minutes rereading it critically trying to understand the brother ...

Hey, I can tell this is great and moving and truly just wonderful. Now if only I had the mental maturity or really mental capacity to understand it. :( I'm ...

Hey, I agree with TheOtherOne. This story was okay. It was a thick burst of dialogue and anger and betrayal going fast, fast fast until it stops being good. The ...

Hey, Welcome to YWS! I hope you have a lot of fun here! :) The first thing you need to do is get rid of this block of writing and ...

Hey, My thoughts are bolded. "I love you." His words stop me in my tracks. What does he think he's doing? He has no right to tell me that. No ...

I lovvvved it! Amazing, cute little piece. :) I'll have the results up by April 10th. :D

Hey, Ugh. How do you write so awesome-like. It's really not fair how talented you are. :) I really like this piece and I do think that the first version ...

Hey, Demeter basically got everything, so I'll comment. :) This was great. I see girls called whores and sluts all the time, while the guy who slept with her is ...

Hey, I've read both of the poems and I definitely like this one more. :D I love the emotions and the descriptions. I PICK YOU, PIKATCHU. :D ~Jas

Hey, This is reaaaaaally good. This is the type of poetry that I sit down for hours trying to write. One thing that bothered me was the lack of capitalization. ...

Hey, AHHHHHHHHHHHH. I LOVE IT. OMG. THIS IS AMAZING. I LOVE THIS. I LOVE YOU. AHHH. :DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD This was great. PLEASE , PLEASE WRITE MORE. CONTINUE IT! I WANT TO ...

Hey, I think what you've done here is grab a bunch of nice flowery sounding words and putting them together. You're telling me that 'the edges are inviting, so lustrous, ...

Hey, I love this. It reminded me a lot of a story I wrote a couple months ago called 'Dear You' in the language and way that it wasn't a ...