JapaneseNinja

First off, I really like how you set the setting for the reader making it easy on them. Now here is the criticism. First, when the narrator has a thought, ...

I haven't read the first chapter, but I think I will read it, because I liked this work. First thing I will comment on is the lack of enticement on ...

I have read this book as well, and your paragraph is so convincing I might just read it again! i really like how you give just enough detail to the ...

Haha, very funny. Did this actually happen to you? Very observant... If you are wondering why I'm not giving you any critique, I'm not one of those people that you ...

Just a really quick reply. Try spacing and creating stanza's in the appropriate places. It will make it easier to read and more appealing to the eyes. I like the ...

First off, this is a strong poem. It says what you the author was inteding for it to say. You know what I mean? It's very straight forward. But one ...

Ok, I read this and kinda stopped during the first stanza. I noticed that the grammar was a little off. The word "Their" should be replaced by the word "They ...

I really like the story, but I was confused in most points. I don't understand who they are, so when he gets killed, I don't really feel sad or anything. ...

I'm not the kind of person who will tell you if you have grammar mistakes or not, but I know when I see a good story, and I think this ...

I like the story so far, but if I were you, I would get some grammar help from somebody, friends or family. Anybody will work. It just seems a bit ...

Well first off, I'm not a great writer so I can't give you any advice or anything like that. Nut I do know that this is an awesome story. I ...