Jaimini

its the flow of emotions that thrill the audience, you must be applauded for what you have written. it comes straight from the heart onto the paper, seems like it ...

i really like what you have done here....your feeling of kicking their behinds for what they spoke of you...want them to fill in your current situational shoes...its nice.... you need ...

the first three stanzas are brilliant....they talk about that important element that you lack, without which your world seems without an impact...you need to feel more, may be you need ...

"possibilities to change the world, are dying. they sit and wait, for nothing. for this endless void, this useless thing, will kill you. it will eat at your soul and ...

hey there..!! u need to work a bit on your presentation and grammar... overall the poetry was amazing..!! :) keep writing... :D