JabberHut

Hiya, Silent! I've read some very good poetry by you, so I was excited to read some more! Unfortunately, this didn't please me as much as other poems of yours. ...

Hi again! I'm not sure how the site would have messed up your grammar. Do you type this in Notepad or Microsoft Word? Perhaps another program? I don't see any ...

Hi there! This was very sweet--kind of sad, actually, but sweet. I was confused for a while, but it kind of cleared things up for me in the last paragraph. ...

Hi there! This is a very cute idea! Being in Santa's presence would very much be a magical experience! Building off of that, I think you could do better in ...

Hiya! You have a really cool idea here! I'm excited to read more of it later on. I have a friend who's big on swimming too, so I no all ...

Hi! This was a very unique concept, I thought. I hope you keep writing on this 'cause I'm interested as to where you will go with it! You had a ...

Hi there! This was excellent . I couldn't tear my eyes away from the story. Your description was admirable. When I finished reading, I noticed my body was tensed up. ...

Finally got to reviewing it, Jigs! ;D So I totally see why you won those tickets. It was very well written, and I was hanging on your every word. And ...

Galeeerius! This was excellently written! I was engrossed with the story; I couldn't tear my eyes away from it. Very well done, and the little Persephone twist at the end? ...

Hi there! I found this story a very easy read, which can be good every once in a while! First of all, grammar and spelling need to be in top ...

Hi, Kamas! *sparklethought* This is a very neat poem! I find it very cool how you went through three stages of this person's life. Like... it's really cool! I think ...

Hi, Queenie! You have some excellent poetry! Of course, this is coming from someone who isn't much of a poet, but I must admit: I enjoy some of your work! ...

Hiya, Doe! I'm back again with some thoughts! First, I must say I have figured out why we lack description in the other chapters: You rush them! You said so ...

Queenie! I said I'd take a look at this, so I'll do my best for a worthy critique. I'm not much of a poet, so forgive me! I think this ...

I'm finally getting to chapter 3 as well, Doe! So the PoV switching really was confusing! I was doubting your comment at the beginning, but it's legit. I suggest perhaps ...