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Well, I don't normally venture into Romantic Fiction, but I saw that you had no reviews yet! :wink: As always, I'll get the nitpicking done first: Hoarse shouts of the ...

:lol: Well done! I loved the bit about turning 16, and the "homework avoidance". Good stuff. I always enjoy reading humour when I can relate to it! Like all of ...

Wow, great work. :) I really liked this, especially Darrian, he was very sinister! Make sure you check over your work though before you post. In quite a few places ...

Whoa, no offence, but my head certainly was swimming with all those rhymes. :lol: As said, you unnecessarily restrict yourself by using an AAA rhyme scheme, and even more so ...

Hey there! Just to give you some heads up, this is my first real read of a true piece of "Romantic Fiction" and my attempt at reviewing some, but it ...

Hi! I really liked this. Especially the repetition in the rhyme. It's so often easy to mess up a poem by concentrating on rhyming it, but you've done this very ...

Hi there! This is wonderful stuff. You certainly had me gripped me until the very end. I can't wait to ream more. :) I do have one very small nitpick ...

Well done! I love historical fiction, especially Roman, and I hope you win that competition! :D You seem to have researched this brilliantly, and that really shows. Your writing seems ...

Hello! :mrgreen: My actions are not a cry for help, For if I wanted help I would just ask. I really liked this stanza, I love how it contrasts with ...

Again, wonderful humour! I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors, so all good there! Like 'Pink' said, it's hard to review these in a critical way, especially as people ...

Hey, here's that review you requested: That forgettable face blending in with the crowd the one that rarely speaks never boisterous, never loud Your use of enjambment is good here, ...

Hey, requested review coming right up! Considering you said this was only your second attempt at poetry this was great! The anger floods into me Filling me up, over flowing ...

Hey, requested review coming right up! The dancer stumbles out the back door and into the alleyway. He leans against it, and as it closes the sounds of music and ...

Yet again Ben, a piece of wonderful comic wit from you. :) I loved the ending, it was genius! :) It seemed to drag on a bit in places though, ...

Hey, welcome to YWS! Just for heads up, it's always good to run the spell checker before posting, and to go over it a couple of times yourself. For instance: ...