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I absolutely loved this! It was really creative to write it in the point of view of the crutch. Also, I liked this: I suppose I should support the side ...

Lucius Cain, a soldier in the glorious army of the Warfront, had fought many battles and wore the wounds that covered his body as proof. The newest addition to his ...

First off, I would turn this into more than one paragraph. It's kind of scary to see all of that bunched together. He saw his unfortunate childhood, his father beating ...

The others have said most of the stuff that needs to be improved, but here are a few more... And, like the tiger he was called, he was restless. He ...

I still am pretty confuzed about what happened (my brain's not working yet this morning,) but what I actually understood I really liked! There are just a few spots that ...

I liked it. I want to go to the beach now. :P The only thing I would suggest is to say 'who do just the same' instead of 'who just ...

I liked this. It seems like we get to know the characters too much for it to be written so formaly, if that makes sense. I'd add names if I ...

Everyone before me has pointed out most of the mistakes. The only thing I could find, was that the first sentence didn't really pull me in. The rest kept my ...

Love it! I couldn't find anything. I'm dying to know what this all means, though! PM me the second you post more/edit more/post any other story, please! :P Also, sorry ...

Well, there's nothing more to say after Sam's review, but there is one thing she didn't have. How does this tie into your story? I've read the next chapter, and ...

*Cracks knuckles* Alright, I'm going to give a MAJOR review. Why? Because this is so good, it's not fair to it not to point out the tiniest thing that will ...

I only realised that something was wrong when you stopped laughing. I only realised what was wrong when I turned to see what you were looking at. Headlights. Flight. The ...

In the beginning I think you should explain what "the Watch" is to avoid unnecessary confusion. Also explain about the murderers and this...guild. The phrase, "venom from a cobra’s fang" ...

I LOVED this. It's written really well; I can actually see what;s happening. You also give the character depth, which is awesome. I feel like I know him! Also, I ...

I like it! However, it doesn't seem like a story anymore. You're kind of fitting in plot information, when it should go in by different means. Like what you did ...