JFW1415

It’s not bad, but it is insanely unrealistic. No way would they discuss a common man’s death without alerting the family first. The boy may find out by watching television ...

I’ll admit it – I’m lazy, and I didn’t read the other critiques. So don’t yell at me if I repeat things? Anyways, I didn’t understand this piece very much. ...

I really can’t decide if I like this or not. I read all four pages without being bored, which I guess is a good thing, but it wan’t that great. ...

This critique will most likely seem very contradictory, mainly because that’s how I think of this piece. It’s very profound. You look at tears very logically and can see the ...

Just a note about the credibility thing, as I'm too tired to write a full review. Writing about Leroy Island is fine. Harry Potter lives at 4 Private Drive, right? ...

The requested critique- Honestly, there’s not much point to this story at the moment. It’s going very slowly and I’m growing bored quickly. You need to give the reader a ...

The requested critique- I purposefully didn't read the prologue before this because 90% of the time they're not needed. I was fine without reading it, so why include it? I ...

Hey! Here’s your requested critique as a prize for entering CIA’s February contest before the 15th. I know – I’m super late, but better late than never, si? Anyways, you ...

Another critique for entering the CIA sacrifice contest: In stories, people like to see variation. In sentence structure, sentence length, paragraph length, chapter length – everything. All your par

Here's another critique for entering CIA's contest. =] Well, I already have Con's judging, so I thought this was going to be amazing, but I guess he was just biased. ...

Jeez, overload of creativity. =] Anyways, this is one of your critiques for entering CIA’s sacrifice contest. A little late, I know, but life gets in the way. =/ I ...

Hey! Thanks for entering CIA's sacrifice contest. It was a little hard to see what he was giving up - his father, maybe? His hopes of his approval? But I ...

This is one of the two complimentary critiques you get for entering CIA's money contest . The other will come from Bittersweet, CIA's guest judge. Honestly? I don't want to ...

This is one of the two complimentary critiques you get for entering CIA's money contest . The other will come from Bittersweet, CIA's guest judge. All right, so normally I ...

This is one of the two complimentary critiques you get for entering CIA's money contest . The other will come from Bittersweet, CIA's guest judge. So, I know this is ...