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I am sooooo sorry I took so long to critique this. You asked for it ages ago, but I couldn’t get to it ‘til now. Life’s been a bit insane ...

It kind of sounds like autumn. I'd make it more clear at the end, just to wrap things up. Since you can't add or take away words, I won't give ...

I'm finally catching up on my critique requests! Nit-Picks She was the only one who got a decent burial, for she was the only one who meant anything to him. ...

First off, I have to apologize – you asked for this critique ages ago, and this is the first I’ve been able to get to it. Life’s been a bit ...

The Otherthings needed to stay away, to stay buried forever deep, never to rise again. For repetition sake, I think ‘to never rise again’ would work better. Great opener, though! ...

I'm so sorry for the wait! Nit-Picks I instantly turned my gaze to the checkered floor. The devil smiled at me calmly. How’s he see her if he’s turned to ...

Hey Jiggity! Nit-Picks You can see them dancing , sometimes. This comma is needed, but it slows the sentence. I’d ditch it. I was lucky enough to see it once, ...

Hey XxxDo! Here comes the promised critique, on time for once. The Darkness Within is a completely different story, of course, haha. No clue when I’ll get to that… My ...

Hey Icaruss! I read this a while ago, and I loved it – I even gave you a gold star! I’m just getting around to critiquing it, though, and am ...

Hey! It's late, but this is short, so you get a quick review. :) Nit-Picks It wasn’t a very complicated matter, if one really thought it over. Yet Aslina didn’t ...

Before I Critique Hey KJ! I’m so sorry I took so long. To make up for it, I’ll just skip the rambles and send this in. Also, the comments were ...

Hey History! I saw this a while ago, but didn’t have time to critique it. Now I’m back, and, though I should be writing, this is short, so I shall ...

Hey Jared! Thanks for letting me know about this. :) Nit-Picks As soon as I stepped through the door after school, my mom threw me into our small car and ...

Hey! Here's the promised critique. Sorry for taking so long! Nit-Picks I never really knew why , on your graduation, you threw your hat in to the air. I suppose ...

*Poke* You're supposed to tell me when you post something, XxxDo! ;) Nit-Picks Aaron laughed with us, hiccupping as he wiped the tears out of his eyes. “Dude , that ...