JC

Crap! I had a totally awesome crit for this, and my stupid internet failed! AHHHHH! hehe, so, I have to re-read this, okay-k? Sorry I haven't returned your call yet. ...

Sorry, I would have put it there, had I known it was poetry. Thank you though. -JC

Really any feedback helps. Thank you. And uh...about the whole poetic prose thing....I haven't studied poetry enough to really know what that is. Mostly I avoid if this is it...well, ...

AH! Much, much better. This was just so much more natural and intresting. *claps* hehe. A few small things though: decades old I could be wrong, but I think this ...

Thanks Clau. While I was writing this one I had my doubts about it, the beginning was too shaky in my eyes, but it seems to have turned out okay. ...

hehe congrats! =D

Sorry it's confusing...and don't worry about being cruel, everybody needs a healthy dose of reality, otherwise nothing would ever improve. So thank you, and please, continue the crits the way ...

Np. Tommorrow kk?

yeah....sorry bout that

they were divorced. And I'm pretty sure you're reading it right.... wait...no...nevermind...sorry

1. It does say why she fired Tammy. 2. What shall I do about the flashback?

muchos!

It's supposed to explain that later. Basically what the lake means to both of them. But thank you! Tres bien mlle JC. Thats got to be the best review you've ...

hehe, that's awesome! lis. I figure since I'm here, I should finish this!!!! :idea: =suggestion :arrow: =edit :?: =clarity :!: =opinion Red= grammer fix no sign [of] life in them. ...

I hope there's some more origionality to this part. I'm taking it out of the norm now. =D I hope you like it! -JC __________________________ I woke up while it ...