Irislillygray

That was awesome! I loved it! Very well written and interesting too! I was funny and adventurous! There are only a few things I want to point out, but I ...

"Sully was a treat." I am not sure what this meant, is he a treat to look at, if so describe his hotness! “So kiddo,” he began, biting into an ...

Hi! Iris here, I am back for another review! I hope that I can help! First some quick corrections. "This house was only twenty years old, only three years older ...

Hello! It's Iris, What a great opening chapter! I liked it, but I do have a few things to point out. "it feeling as if it was a piggy bank ...

Wow! What an awesome beginning to what seems like an awesome story! Not much I can correct you on, but here goes nothing! Fist off, I am not sure what ...

Very nice, I love how you made the Uranians seem more human. A lot of the enemies in stories are mindless monsters, I like how you gave them a more ...

Good start to your story! I liked it! Here are a few tips I have. I hope they help you! This sentence is a little choppy, "He climbed off his ...

Interesting, very mysterious. I like the last sentence. I like the ideal and were you are heading with your story, but I want more. I want more description. The vagueness ...

Wow, deep. But here is a few pointers. Don't know if they will help, you can do with them what you wish. "This sea owns me, owes me." You say ...