Industrio

Wow, you have really strong imagery here. Heavy, steel, metal. Dozing. This makes me think of a sleeping monster. Spitting bullets, sighing gunpowder. It's a short poem, but exquisitely written. ...

Whoa, creepy. Reminds me of Blue Beard.

NOTE: This poem is unfinished and probably will stay that way for a while, until I feel like finishing it.

Thanks! I know, it isn't very scary. I wasn't attempting to evoke a fear-response in the reader. It was just the result of a writing prompt to use sound verbs. ...

Thank you! I am trying to branch out from the "teenager writing about other teenagers" syndrome. It's more interesting to explore different kinds of characters.

Thank you very much!

Hmm, it sounds interesting. I'll have to read it. I guess, what I was going for in this piece was more an exercise in showing, rather than telling. In the ...

I enjoyed reading your poem! Thanks for writing it! :) I basically imagine a jock seducing a girl who knows better....pretty simple when it is layed out that way, but ...

Thanks so much!

Thank you! I'll have to write something happier for your little bro!

Haha, thank you! I could spruce it up a bit, but some things ought to be left where they are.

Thanks!

Gah! Thank you! I totally forgot. XD

Hmmm....Indie, I think could work. Or Indus. Whichever is fine. :)

Oh, and remind me to review this later!