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Re: Doing It
Hello floatingvoice, This is a wonderful short story, but not in the sense of the word wonderful. It's scary, suspenseful, horrible, and all too real. It's sad that some people ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: Arabian Dances
Hi XPresidentTurtlesX, This a really beautiful piece, (The poem and the music). I can tell you really loved playing this piece by the amount of well written poetry that went ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: The exaggerated life of a teen
Hello, Mysterium, I do like this story and it does have potential but there is always room for improvement. The beginning part is confusing to me. Why did you have ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: Tales and Strings of L~I~F~E: Chapter One, Strange Man And Sparkles (Updated)
Hello Panda11, I do enjoy this story, it has good substance but like kevin25a said it has numerous problems with spelling and grammar. One thing I noticed was when you ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: Alan's Optical Illusion Chapter 1
Hi JSS394, This sounds like a great story, but like the other two comments said it's far to long for a proper review. There are quite a few run on ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: My Best Friend is Gay.
Hello lakegirls, This is a beautiful poem. It is very powerful and I'm glad this isn't based off real events but there are real events all to similar to this ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: Eternal Cycle: Transfiguration of the Essence
Hey jamesrae123, I like this story a lot. It has the right amount of suspense and progression. You have good substance to your writing but some of the dialogue is ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: The Cosmos Dethroned
Hello Cirute, This is a great short story! I can't wait to find out what happens to Ren and Kaev next. This is a good start to what you said ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: 10 ways to Ace your College Interview...
Hello MaheenYasmeen22, This is a wonderful compilation of all the good things to do in a college interview. Even though this is specifically geared for college I'm sure this goes ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: A Manifesto From the Banished
Hey Despondence, This is a very interesting start to your story, I like it. It has the perfect amount of vagueness that is perfect for a prologue but it still ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: Title: Cherry blossom. (1st part of prologue)
Hi eray20, I love this story! It is captivating and intriguing, I can't wait to find out what happens next. I liked how you italicized mother. It gave it almost ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: Where Are My Keys
Hello Kyle Rumbold, I'm not really sure how I feel about this story. I am kind of confused as to the point, (lack of conflict, rising action, turning point, and ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: The Rivers Clinic
Hello Fizz, This is a very powerful piece of work. I can say that I have never been depressed, so this makes it easy to forget what some people are ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: The Death Of William Bristowe
A review for Team Sassy Ladybugs-- This is a sickeningly lovely story. It's twisted yet refined in a regal manner that I can't describe. Just from this work I can ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: Just Some Things I Wanted to Say
Review for Team Sassy Ladybugs- This is a great poem. I can tell you really tell you love the person you wrote this for. It's not only quirky and filled ...
May 31, 2015
