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  • Short Story » Narrative, Realistic Re: Doing It

    Hello floatingvoice, This is a wonderful short story, but not in the sense of the word wonderful. It's scary, suspenseful, horrible, and all too real. It's sad that some people ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other Re: Arabian Dances

    Hi XPresidentTurtlesX, This a really beautiful piece, (The poem and the music). I can tell you really loved playing this piece by the amount of well written poetry that went ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Other Re: The exaggerated life of a teen

    Hello, Mysterium, I do like this story and it does have potential but there is always room for improvement. The beginning part is confusing to me. Why did you have ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Other » Fanfiction, Fantasy Re: Tales and Strings of L~I~F~E: Chapter One, Strange Man And Sparkles (Updated)

    Hello Panda11, I do enjoy this story, it has good substance but like kevin25a said it has numerous problems with spelling and grammar. One thing I noticed was when you ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Romantic Re: Alan's Optical Illusion Chapter 1

    Hi JSS394, This sounds like a great story, but like the other two comments said it's far to long for a proper review. There are quite a few run on ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: My Best Friend is Gay.

    Hello lakegirls, This is a beautiful poem. It is very powerful and I'm glad this isn't based off real events but there are real events all to similar to this ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Eternal Cycle: Transfiguration of the Essence

    Hey jamesrae123, I like this story a lot. It has the right amount of suspense and progression. You have good substance to your writing but some of the dialogue is ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Other Re: The Cosmos Dethroned

    Hello Cirute, This is a great short story! I can't wait to find out what happens to Ren and Kaev next. This is a good start to what you said ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Other » Realistic, Other Re: 10 ways to Ace your College Interview...

    Hello MaheenYasmeen22, This is a wonderful compilation of all the good things to do in a college interview. Even though this is specifically geared for college I'm sure this goes ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Other » Fanfiction, Narrative Re: A Manifesto From the Banished

    Hey Despondence, This is a very interesting start to your story, I like it. It has the perfect amount of vagueness that is perfect for a prologue but it still ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Action / Adventure Re: Title: Cherry blossom. (1st part of prologue)

    Hi eray20, I love this story! It is captivating and intriguing, I can't wait to find out what happens next. I liked how you italicized mother. It gave it almost ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Short Story » Humor, General Re: Where Are My Keys

    Hello Kyle Rumbold, I'm not really sure how I feel about this story. I am kind of confused as to the point, (lack of conflict, rising action, turning point, and ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Other » General, General Re: The Rivers Clinic

    Hello Fizz, This is a very powerful piece of work. I can say that I have never been depressed, so this makes it easy to forget what some people are ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Death Of William Bristowe

    A review for Team Sassy Ladybugs-- This is a sickeningly lovely story. It's twisted yet refined in a regal manner that I can't describe. Just from this work I can ...

    May 31, 2015
  • Poetry » Romantic, Narrative Re: Just Some Things I Wanted to Say

    Review for Team Sassy Ladybugs- This is a great poem. I can tell you really tell you love the person you wrote this for. It's not only quirky and filled ...

    May 31, 2015


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