Ikafe

Oh my god, for a rough draft this was really good. You had little spelling mistakes so I suggest that you proof read over this. Well this piece has a ...

I saw the whole story playing in front of my eyes while reading this, seriously this was brilliant and it makes me want to read more. I'm surely going to ...

Thanks guys, I agree with you about the reaction of Heather its not realistic, sorry I'll try to change it. Thanks for the reviews:)

Oh, I like this. I mean it's very intersting:) I can't to read more (love the idea for the story:)....It's realy interesting...

:wink: Thanks guys for all your advice, I rewrote the poem, Please say what you think about it? I added some more lines. Ikafe :arrow: :P

Thanks for the Advice Snoink, I'll try to work on my poem, to make it even better :P

:elephant: Oh...I love this...she's going to be the only girl at her school, I would die if that like happened to me, this story is heading in a good direction. ...

:D Thanks for the advice curiousvampire I'll think about how to make the start more interesting, and I'll definately proofread more....

:D :D Thanks for the advice, I'll try to improve this chapter and I'll surely continue to write more...oh and thanks for the critique everyone learns from their mistakes :elephant: ...

:D Oh I liked it...I can't wait to read more!!! :D

:elephant: It was great...I loved it!!!! :D