Ignatius5453

Great Shakespearian sonnet, it would be cool if you tried at Petrarchian one next. But GREAT job, the only thing I would change is 'durst' that word just doesnt sound ...

I chuckled a little when I read this because I used to be horrible at sarcasm, I literally practiced sarcasm, just so I didnt seem like an idiot, so this ...

Interesting.... all I can really say. I dont totally agree with the whole homosexuality thing, Im a staunch conservative, but this letter-thing was really heartfelt, seems like you spent a ...

Legen....... wait for it .......dary Good poem, I feel your pain, I used to sleepwalk, not that its as bad as insomnia or anything, but great poem. Keep Writing!

Well, you've gotten a lot of good advice on this poem already, most of which are extremely long reviews, but I'll just say this: Good poem, just fix the first ...

I agree with some of the other critiquers, break it up into descending lines instead of a group of run-on sentences.

I looked at the brick wall of jumbled words after I expected to read a bunch of stanzas, and couldnt read it. PLEASE space it out, my brain can't comprehend ...

Oh.... My..... God...... it was great. I read the spoiler afterwards and that made it even more harrowing. I loved it, it was great. I feel sooo bad that you ...

Thanks guys for the glowing reviews. I was proud of this work, glad to see some people liked it!

Great job! I liked it a lot. I have no bad comments to make, great job. It would be a lot easier to read if you broke it up into ...

I absoluteld hated... that there wasnt more. Great job! I have absolutely no complaints. Keep Writing!

Interesting storyline, I'd like to read more, it caught my interest.

I dont usually like this kind of stuff, but I felt the emotion in this poem, I didnt quite feel the chills I get when I read something really good, ...

Its a little raw, but not all-together bad. With a little practice and some time revising this, it could turn into a solid work. Keep writing!