Ieatworms

I like how honest and frank this is.

Beautiful. Unique. Wish I wrote something like that.

I really like how well you convey the mood here. Very sexy but not too overt. I don't like the Marilyn Monroe reference, though. I think I have a clear ...

Nice modern flare

Hey! Give yourself some credit. Add another six verses and you have a verifiable rap in the works.

Should I take a cue from e e cummings and keep all "I" "she" and "girl" (the new chick) references in lower case (regardless of grammar) so that they better ...

Wow. Very strong. Good progression toward your point. I particularly like [quote]['sweetheart you're a badchick with all those hairflicks, those cheaptricks.'] [/quote]

Boy do I know that feeling. Good use of your anger. If I may make a suggestion: [quote] With the ego that shouldn't be there? [/quote] I'm sure you can ...

Cute. I really want to hand you my dog-earred anthologies of poetry so you can read the funny and profound out of meter and rhyme.

About the "cat-scrathed" v "snake skin" debate; WHY WRITE SOMETHING IF IT DOESN"T MAKE SENSE TO YOU? NEVER WRITE SOMETHING BECAUSE YOU THINK IT SOUNDS COOL. Poetry communicates. It shouldn't ...

I like that your poem addresses a certain but unkown person.... it gives you a good sense of direction. Try reading this outloud to yourself, though. You may find some ...

You have a avery clear voice and tone, as well as strong imagery. I would suggest rethinking the lines referencing the hallway. It dates you and the poem to school ...

No trash; no crying.