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One morning I woke up and decided that I'd warn them about the monsters waiting in hell; they looked at me with curious eyes, wondering if maybe I could be ...

First, I liked the rhymes. Second, I'd suggest breaking your poem into stanzas . I think you should make the sentences read like actual sentences. If I was reading the ...

This is good. The tone is nice and formal. I'm assuming that you'll substitute the actual name, for the xxx, when you submit it. I didn't really like your beginning. ...

Someone's angry! :) We should start a site and plan to take over the world! No men allowed on our site! lol :)

(Note: This is a speech I have written, but i can't decide if it should be informative or persuasive any opinion will help.Also the things in bold are stats that ...

First, your premise has been done before. Since it's been done before, you have to show us how this is different than all the other thief-detective stories out there. Second, ...

This is interesting. I don't really know anything about Halo, so I'll give you general impressions. To me this piece felt a little flat. Could you show us more of ...

Elegant curls spiral down her back like an extra garment enrobing Spell check is giving me a red squiggly line here. I would check this word. her with a certain ...

This is good. I don't have much to say about it. I think you should show the interaction between Maxie and his dad a bit more in this chapter. All ...

Erik Levers, 14 years old, approximately 5'7, I think there should be an is here avoiding my glance, trying to hide himself. My mind is reeling so fast right now ...

I never thought I'd say this, but there is too much description in here. Can we have some more action in here please? Also, your paragraphs are really thick. You ...

I like this. Lumi when he reviewed my poem said that poetry should have proper punctuation, like periods and the rest. This has good rhythm, although the flow seemed a ...

I tried to sing this, but wound up laughing before I got to the chorus. :D Electron should be electrons, there's more than one. Watch out for the type o's! ...

How did you get the nickname Brooklyn from "Kolbey-Rae Simmons?" "I spent the next hour getting ready for the cinemas, we were meeting the boys: Jack, Damon and Jared." This ...

"I tried to look all around-the gardens, a mixture of deep green like Peter's eyes and a pale, yet cheery green." Why is there a dash in this sentence? "Was ...