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  • Article / Essay » Culture, Realistic Re: Juju

    That is beautiful. I love the way that everything fits together, the stories and thoughts of this person who lives in fear. The way the thoughts add to the story ...

    May 25, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Romantic Re: Chapter 1: Almond Milk

    Okay, that was amazing I love your writing style, and everything flows well. I only had a few corrections. Fist in the part that says:Fault’s on you moron, you did ...

    Apr 27, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: My Darling

    This is an excellent poem. There are only a few mistakes and a few confusing parts, so good job! You have placed commas in extra places a few times, stanzas ...

    Apr 24, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Forever I Will Be.

    Ok, first off this is a great poem and I think it has a LOT of potential, but I have to agree with @iggy. You need more imagery. Maybe instead ...

    Apr 21, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: ..

    This poem nearly made me weep in public. It is very heartfelt, and truly conveys the need for praying. You have some grammatical errors, and need to capitalize God several ...

    Mar 21, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Night Terrors

    Like @jaytao says, the beginning is a bit confusing. The way the rhyming pattern goes makes it a little hard to read. You might consider revising the line "now she's ...

    Mar 21, 2014
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: The Hunger Games short fanfic

    Oh. I really liked that. I love reading hunger games fan fiction. I liked the way you included quotes from the book. Also, I always thought it would be interesting ...

    Dec 21, 2013
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: With all the Angelfish

    I like this poem. It beautifully speaks of the prefix that is found in both terrific and terrible, that means love and fear. The choice of words is amazing, and ...

    Nov 21, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, Lyrical Re: only a book, only life

    I like this a lot, the rhythm, the choice of words, it is all very beautiful. The part 'her paper skin, her inky heart' is my favorite. The third stanza ...

    Nov 21, 2013


what are stories if not just vehicles for the pain of your own heart
— soundofmind