IamTraunt

Hey! IamTruant here! First, There’s Paul, ^ This doesn't look right. It looks a bit like you were writing a poem :-D Maybe you should put: First, there’s Paul. This ...

Hey! ImTruant here! Before I go into depth of your incredibly intriguing work, here's some of my nitpicks: Arrays of diffused winter sun filled the bare forest with warmth, fresh ...

Hey! IamTruant here! I am really intrigued by your chapter! I was quickly draw into the action and I felt as I waas there watching the king hammering his mighty ...

Hey! IamTruant here! You've picked a really interesting theme! Great start! I was intrigued right from the beginning! Just something you need to change: THe voice of my half brother ...

Hey! IamTruant! I just have say... Wow. Your story is certainly interesting!! Characters: Your protagonist is very intriguing! My first thoughts were: a murder with sympathy. Wow! This adds a ...

Hey! IamTruant here! This was a brilliant third chapter to your story! Well done! Pace: Your flow was great. It was constant and smooth and your paragraphs did flow into ...

Hey! I'm IamTruant! Wow. Right from the beginning you caught my attention! So well done for that! Just a few adjustments needed: "Was it a vampire, werewolf, witch, or something ...

Hey! Its IamTruant here! I was intrigued by the beginning of the chapter, especially when you put: "It has an air of welcome- well except for the police tape." Ooh, ...

Hey! IamTruant here! loved your use of language, especially when you put: "Allison just buried her head in her hands trying to force tears back into their ducts." Just some ...

Hey! IamTruant here! Well done, a really good poem. The flow is great until the third stanza on "a game of solo tic tac toe", but others your poem is ...

Hey! IamTruant here! The first part of your story intrigued me! You made me want to read on, I wanted to find out who the person shouting was. And that's ...

Hey! IamTraunt here! I love the relationship between son and father! Its really life like! Especially 'how was your day?' Loved it! Somethings you need to adjust: "Hello(,) son(.) How ...

Hey! IamTruant here! I am intrigued by your story. Just a few minor adjustments: "and if I'm true full" < 'truthful'. "If there were people out there (-) surely they ...

Hey! IamTruant here! Just some things you need to adjust: "If the solar flares didn't kill them already, the radioactivity surely would have mutated them." - instead of 'didn't' it ...

Hey! IamTruant here! Wow. The atmosphere you put into your story was brilliant. Especially when you put: "was dark, and the mist was so thick, she could barely see the ...