IamTraunt

Hey! IamTruant here as requested! Again with the amazingly-fantastic-brilliance-of-you-writing-realistically! Ahem. I can just imagine Asteria lying on her bed groaning with piles of beer bottles stre

Hey! IamTruant here as requested! Lets get down to business (or complementing) Characters Even though this chapter is based on Frey, it brings out the personalities of others. First off, ...

Hey! IamTruant as requested! I reviewed Chapter One for you, so I am following your story with every chapter! Characters: I love Juno. She is incredible smart and she puts ...

Hey! IamTraunt here! I have been reading your story since the beginning and I absolutely love it! Your grammar is near to perfect, your characters are unique and have their ...

Hey! IamTruant here! Wow. Seriously. I felt like I was reading someone life story not a FanFiction story! It was truly great, the way you put across Kevin's emptiness and ...

Hey! IamTraunt here! Before I talk about Dialogue and Characters, here are some adjustments you need to make: "What, you thought just because you left I’d stop punishing NIck ? ...

IamTraunt! For starters, I love how you put that people just skim through the text just because its "boring". I could really relate to that. Just a little thing you ...

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Hey! IamTraunt here! Just a little mistake: You’ll need to stay here and wait for her . ^ I don't think the policeman would have know about his mom. Characters ...

Hey! IamTruant here! You have a great vocabulary of words in your chapter and I was like: "Wow, how many more can you throw in there!" And then you put: ...

Hey! IamTraunt here! Just to help with alterations: Paragraph 1: If he grabs by it's tail he is awarded with honor from his tribe. Would sound more accurate. Paragraph 2: ...

Hey! IamTraunt here! Just something you need to correct: Below the hair, tired, brown eyes struggled to keep the eyelids up. Should be: Below the hair, tired, brown eyes struggled ...

Hey! IamTraunt here! Some little things you need to correct: He’d have a few words to him when he got back. Instead of 'to' it should be 'with': He’d have ...

Hey! IamTraunt here! Even though your chapter is short - it is amazing! You vocabulary is awesome, especially when you are describing Lena and Nadiya fighting! Right from the beginning ...

Hey! IamTruant here! Just before I go into Characters and Dialogue, here are some little mistakes: The soldiers moved into a saluting stance stance , an arm snaked around my ...