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Well nice to know you you took(I'm guessing) a very long time to write type this all down lol thank you

Whoa! I like this poem allot. Short simple and sweet. In the end i do fell the emotion of it all despite it being short. Good Job Bro *likes*

lol thank you very much :) and i will do so

The "average" thing was put there on purpose lol. Thank you for the feed back

lol thank you very much :) thanks for pointing out the mistakes also lol

well thank you for your honest opinion lol and well it isn't really a story its just how my day went about. I'm planning on this being the first chapter ...

well heres the thing with that lol Why would anyone ditch school to go to church/library? people i believe in my opinion will think generally its stupid to do so ...

lol no problem and thank you

pretty typical. Give more detail. Take your time with it and have more character development so the reader feels for these wouldn't hurt for it to be a bit longer. ...

I don't understand, how are the names 'stereotypical'?

Ok, lol. Thank you for taking your time.

no help but ok

Lol yes I know my spelling sucks... When I showed this to my English teacher she offered help on that and well some grammar issues. I'll ask her to help ...

ok, now its the full chapter