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Wow, wow, wow! You've got real talent here BlueAfrica! This might be months old but I had to comment anyway. The people, scene, and overall flow was amazingly natural and ...

Ah...Maybe your story was so good, the comment system broke down and had to post this twice.

Pomeroy, that was just great! I mean usually the stories are just too long to get through and I find myself dropping off halfway. Not with this story though; You've ...

Pomeroy, that was just great! I mean usually the stories are just too long to get through and I find myself dropping off halfway. Not with this story though; You've ...

Glad I could help. Even for the tone, I'd go with capital "I"s and try to bring the tone through some other way. As for the quotation, i was wondering ...

Great! I'm glad I could help!

What a beautiful piece! Quite different than normal but I think it's something everyone should read. So trash the thought of taking this down. Maybe even something to be added ...

Appreciate the comment! Thanks!

Thanks for the reply. About adding the "or" in the line, a villanelle has to be written in Iambic pentameter meaning that it has to have 10 syllables in each ...