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What a beautiful story! :D :D I loved the scene where she is on the pier with her hair blowing in the wind. It just grabbed me. There was so ...

I cannot remember the name of the book, but it was set up as if we were reading a play script. I hated it. There was too much dialogue and ...

This had great moral value and It really caught my attention! I do agree with Ecrivain, you do need to revise how your script is set up and emphasize the ...

I liked how your character learned something from this experience. It was believable, too. I would have liked to have seen what exactly happened between them that made her break ...

I really liked how your story painted a descriptive picture in my head as I could clearly see what was really going on. The other repliers pretty much summed up ...

This has to be my favorite parody so far! Definitely a like for this one! :lol: :lol:

The first paragraph was sort of what my mornings go. It made me laugh! There are some things that you need to fix. Before each quotation add a period or ...

That was so sad :( , yet so good! :D The only advice I have is that you should start a new paragraph after each character speaks. Also, detail will ...

I loved the idea of the story. It was very sad, yet sweet. However, I want to see a bit more of Margaret's transition from being cold to the narrator ...

This was a really touching story. So sad. There is one thing I would change. I would make the narrorator a bit older. You said she was eleven, however I ...

What a cute story! I was dissapointed at the end, but that was ententional. :D I liked how you made the letter an actual character. I will never think of ...

Welcome to Young Writers! I just joined today and I am still getting in the swing of things. The way you wrote this story really but me in the senerio ...

I really enjoyed reading your story. However, it did seem to stop abruptly as if the ending was missing. Also, whenever I think of the title "Silly's Little Love Story" ...

I believe your writing painted a pretty clear picture in my mind and I was looking forward to each sentence. I believe that the Werewolf and Vampire popularity has reached ...