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Ok first off, I mean I would personally be scared if a wolf were to happen upon me in the middle of the night. But you make it seem like ...

I've never read this kind of style, so I can say that it's the best one I've read. It was confusing at some parts, but then I found out that ...

Okay, first off I think you should have more of an intro. I mean I like it the way it is but maybe if you could introduce the characters more, ...

OK I'm not going to lie, a piece about a time machine doesn't really catch my attention right away. I did read it though and I found it quite interesting. ...

Wow... Now is this your first attempt at writing or at writing romance? I'm sorry if I would look around the board more I guess I would know. It's really ...

Tristans words caught in his mouth as tried to speak, with much diffuculty he finally managed an apolgey. It's apology. Caught off guard his lost his train of thought. He ...

First off I think you could add more of an entrance. “Good; cause if you stuff up you’re a dead man” Nick gulpt and loosened his collar. Try gulped instead ...

"Hi, I'm Kelly (I stuck out my hand like an idiot. He looked at me like I was nuts. I just brought my hand back down.) I am a junior, ...

Okay let me first say that I thought it was well written and I haven't read anything like that before. I liked it. It was a little hard to follow ...

"Please, don't let me die! please don't let me die!" Captalize the second please My body sizzled and crumbeled, I could feel the life drifting out of me... It's spelled ...