Harley

Don't fight :P I probably wouldn't say "We could get ourselves killed" but then again I am strange lol 8) Keep those critz coming!!!!!!! Pleeeeeease!

Jack, do you EVER go with the crowd?! lol :lol: At least the money went to cancer and other good causes. :wink: C'mon guys!! Buy em!!

I'm not actually Christian, no, but I do believe in heaven and stuff.

Thanks for all your help. I made it a little stronger at the end and it seems to make the story more believable and even, sorta like scales. I took ...

All I can say is that this is really... good! Keep up the good work :D

This is a very interesting piece but I don't think it flows very well. Your words are... sticky and the way it is set out is quite complex. I think ...

I can totally relate to what the character is feeling. You have really expressed it well, and I am wondering if maybe the character is based on you?

this was really dood, but pleeease! i want them to meet! :D

trying means hard it was meant to be that way. Thanx 4 da critz-keep em coming!!!!!!!

i have asthma... This was totally good because i love songs which sorta dont tell a story

The way you say words became rigid made my mind go funny... sort of like rachels. the only thing is you say "No more pills! It says." and this doesn't ...

This is really good but it definitely needs some work. Try fixing the typos and it should be a lot better, and make sure you keep th present tense all ...

that was really great but I think you have 2 make it a weensy bit clearer that they aren't actual brothers