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Hello, Northstar! I have to admit, I was a little skeptical about the quality of this piece, especially when I saw the uncapitalized 'i's. But as I read on, I ...

This is a pretty funny poem, great job! Just a few things. 1. The poem goes, "my stomach's soon growling/after I've had a bite to eat." I think the wording ...

This poem is very engaging/interesting for many reasons. The first reason is obviously formatting. Your line breaks and spacing is very unique. At first it seems sort of awkward, but ...

This is a great piece--I really like how you stopped occasionally and put important/emphasized phrases on a different line. The plotting of the chapter is very solid, you can picture ...

Wow. Just wow. This is an amazing, expressive piece. I especially love the rhythm of it and the line "forced it between gritted teeth". Nice imagery. One thing-- the spacing ...

I like the rhyming in this poem. You manage to take a darker subject and make it seem (for lack of a better word)… fun. As someone mentioned before, the ...

This is an interesting prologue because of two things: 1) Its beginning. "They're all looking at me. 'Cause who wouldn't?" The reader is intrigued: Why IS everyone looking at him/her ...

Wow. This is a beautiful beginning to your story, and if you're writing more, I'd be more than happy to read it. Just a couple things: 1. Sometimes you use ...

This is a beautiful poem--I never thought I would sympathize with Medusa, but I do now. One thing: the sentence "a boy with a miniature golden sword" is kind of ...

Hello, BellaRoma! This piece is a great start to any book, except for a few flaws: 1. As some have mentioned before, your dialogue can be a bit unrealistic and ...