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  • Poetry » Culture, Spiritual Re: What is it Really?

    Alright! First, please make sure from now on to spell-check your work before you post it up. Spelling errors are easy to find with word processors, or even on the ...

    Mar 1, 2013
  • Short Story » Supernatural, Science Fiction Re: The Adventures of Maynard Ray

    You do have this going for you: you have me interested about what exactly this professor has discovered and what practical uses it has, if he'll indeed get out of ...

    Mar 1, 2013
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: The Society Song

    Okay! First, I will very quickly give my over all perception of this song. I feel like a sentiment on this topic is better delivered with an "us" in mind ...

    Mar 1, 2013
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: Spring

    Yo yeah! I am leaving some comments as I work my way through: But on the way back, a man had fired a gun and she'd dropped it with a ...

    Mar 1, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other Re: Breathe

    I love a lot in this poem, and I think a lot in this poem falls flat. The highest concentration of awesome is here: a tarnished memory of the sweet ...

    Feb 28, 2013
  • Other » General, General Re: The Survivor's

    Hey, this was probably meant to be put in the storybooks section of the website, but I figured a little reviewing of it couldn't hurt anyway, right? So I'll give ...

    Feb 24, 2013
  • Other » Romantic, Fantasy Re: As We Driften Apart Chapter 0

    Hey! This is a pretty interesting introduction. The idea of opening at the end is one that works pretty well. I mean, now we know this character has to die, ...

    Feb 24, 2013
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Fallen

    Okay, hey Soul! What's good about this piece is that it opens up a whole new world in just a couple of paragraphs. I think I like best when books ...

    Feb 24, 2013
  • Short Story » Dramatic, General Re: St. Valentine's Day, 1997

    Right away, the first thing that needs attention is tenses. You switch tenses between the first and second and it happens again a little later. Choose past or choose present, ...

    Feb 24, 2013
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: Graveyard

    Hey, Kay. So I want to start out by saying this is full of feeling for people who care about animals. And there's a lot that goes on in this ...

    Feb 24, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Sailor

    This was awesome. I love that the rhymes aren't forced at all, that it brings out a lot of images (I'm a sucker for sea imagery and stories), and that ...

    Feb 24, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Song of The Writer.

    Oh my, I love this. I think it needs more thought and more work, but I love the quick step timing of the rhythm and the direct address. The opening ...

    Feb 24, 2013
  • Other » Dramatic, Spiritual Re: As A Friend

    This is absolutely a fantastic idea for a piece. A lot of us have read the stories where the main character is bothered because the kid they like doesn't like ...

    Feb 24, 2013
  • Poetry » Literature, Lyrical Re: Homer's Lament

    I'm going to be taking this from the perspective of someone who has a vague idea of mythology, but hasn't studied it obsessively. And for me, that makes this poem ...

    Feb 24, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Three Lines of Three, Haikus, Perhaps

    I'd say that the first two are actually haikus! From what I understand, the thing that can make a haiku effective is having some kind of twist or unexpected direction ...

    Feb 24, 2013


You have light and peace inside you. If you let it out, you can change the world around you.
— Uncle Iroh, Avatar the Last Airbender