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Re: What is it Really?
Alright! First, please make sure from now on to spell-check your work before you post it up. Spelling errors are easy to find with word processors, or even on the ...
Mar 1, 2013 -
Re: The Adventures of Maynard Ray
You do have this going for you: you have me interested about what exactly this professor has discovered and what practical uses it has, if he'll indeed get out of ...
Mar 1, 2013 -
Re: The Society Song
Okay! First, I will very quickly give my over all perception of this song. I feel like a sentiment on this topic is better delivered with an "us" in mind ...
Mar 1, 2013 -
Re: Spring
Yo yeah! I am leaving some comments as I work my way through: But on the way back, a man had fired a gun and she'd dropped it with a ...
Mar 1, 2013 -
Re: Breathe
I love a lot in this poem, and I think a lot in this poem falls flat. The highest concentration of awesome is here: a tarnished memory of the sweet ...
Feb 28, 2013 -
Re: The Survivor's
Hey, this was probably meant to be put in the storybooks section of the website, but I figured a little reviewing of it couldn't hurt anyway, right? So I'll give ...
Feb 24, 2013 -
Re: As We Driften Apart Chapter 0
Hey! This is a pretty interesting introduction. The idea of opening at the end is one that works pretty well. I mean, now we know this character has to die, ...
Feb 24, 2013 -
Re: Fallen
Okay, hey Soul! What's good about this piece is that it opens up a whole new world in just a couple of paragraphs. I think I like best when books ...
Feb 24, 2013 -
Re: St. Valentine's Day, 1997
Right away, the first thing that needs attention is tenses. You switch tenses between the first and second and it happens again a little later. Choose past or choose present, ...
Feb 24, 2013 -
Re: Graveyard
Hey, Kay. So I want to start out by saying this is full of feeling for people who care about animals. And there's a lot that goes on in this ...
Feb 24, 2013 -
Re: The Sailor
This was awesome. I love that the rhymes aren't forced at all, that it brings out a lot of images (I'm a sucker for sea imagery and stories), and that ...
Feb 24, 2013 -
Re: The Song of The Writer.
Oh my, I love this. I think it needs more thought and more work, but I love the quick step timing of the rhythm and the direct address. The opening ...
Feb 24, 2013 -
Re: As A Friend
This is absolutely a fantastic idea for a piece. A lot of us have read the stories where the main character is bothered because the kid they like doesn't like ...
Feb 24, 2013 -
Re: Homer's Lament
I'm going to be taking this from the perspective of someone who has a vague idea of mythology, but hasn't studied it obsessively. And for me, that makes this poem ...
Feb 24, 2013 -
Re: Three Lines of Three, Haikus, Perhaps
I'd say that the first two are actually haikus! From what I understand, the thing that can make a haiku effective is having some kind of twist or unexpected direction ...
Feb 24, 2013
