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Hi, again, Another satisfying chapter. I loved the moment at the gate when there's a lot of awkwardness because Rebecca just assumed the leader of the village was a man. ...

Doorman Dan, you are working on a fine piece here. It's like a dance in a pool of alliteration, and you managed to fish out a couple of really powerful ...

Hi, again, I am really impressed with the character development in this chapter. We see more of Cody's desperation, but I also learn a lot about how Cage interprets the ...

Hello again, I see Eros's review below, and I liked not only that he's devoted to the cause (Cody), but I feel like I get a sense that he's also ...

Here again! You know, I'm not usually one for action scenes. I dislike action movies because it feels like it is just minute after minute of punch punch punch kick ...

Here I am again! :) I am enjoying the action that's happening. I especially like how you describe these moments that don't necessarily come to fruition but add a lot ...

Hello again, I really loved this chapter, because it started building out the world for me that I probably missed in the first nine chapters. Suddenly, I realized that the ...

Back again! Well, I was surprised that there was a zipper involved. Maybe I'm not quite clear on the time line of the story, but it seemed like "old" times, ...

I'm back! :) So, I again like that the story is moving forward at a good pace, but there were two things I had comments about. First, Cage describes his ...

Hello again, I love the way you describe the village so effortlessly, mentioning that the villagers are living between two mountains. This is a giant image, and I get a ...

Hello, Great King! I know that the note at the top of your piece asks that we do not read this section if we haven't read the previous sections. However, ...

Hey again, Skins, I just wanted to say that after the first mention of "stool-gate" here in chapter seven, my previous comment of "nothing happened" was definitely wrote. Something happened ...

Hey, Skins, I'm jumping in on this work at chapter six with no idea what it's about, so we'll both keep in mind that the writing that comes before and ...

Lavvie, I didn't intend to read this. I read your description of the project in the writer's corner and was interested, but also need to be doing my homework, so ...

What I liked best about this poem was that it made me want more details. I wanted to know a little more about the motivation behind each character. I thought ...