Halycon

Just wondering if this sounds any good before I decide whethe ror not to continue.I felt the warm sandy soil beneath my fingers and opened my eyes. The blue sky ...

Tell me if you think this goes too fastI felt the warm sandy soil beneath my fingers and opened my eyes. The blue sky stared back. The sun was at ...

If the world is my oysteryou were the pearl.Two cogs in motion, we walked the empty streets laden with blankets of snowand savoured the beautiful isolation. Like timid dormice your ...

Second poem .Paper face.I look upon your face and wonder what changed;it seems pale, corpselike, shallow and emptyand your heart no longer beats on your sleeve.Whereas your mouth once formed ...

I couldn't get any ideas for my other story and I was struggling to make it flow, so I wrote this in the meantime. Tear it apart. It was night. ...

The Sword and the Pen.This is the path of violencesharp-edged and glitteringcruel, cold, calculatingdesigned for death~How many liveshave been cleaved into piecesby a thrustof bloodthirsty, tempered s

Needs some work helping it flow I think....~Unfamiliar ceilings~We sit on a splintered, sandy mosaicas the unfamiliar ceilingsof foreign skies stretch above usBoundless, uncaring, free.~Sylphs of cool

Needs some work on the flow I think..Dead Season~Evening air pulses around meLost amongst the corrugated furrowsOf hunchbacked feilds, rolling,Petrified mid-flow~The sun beds down beneath Layers of th

This is a kind first for me, writing a more experimental, symbolism driven poem.you can tear it apart if you like, but what would be really helpful is feedback on ...

Small Treasons~You sayYour small treasons bother me too muchBut look from an acute angleSee them, tiny follicles of sand tickingoneby oneInto my cusp of this hourglassCollecting silently, each diminut

I know it's a bit rough around the edges, so any help would be appreiciated~Peeling Dreams~Lazy summer hazeinfects the pathways and alleys of this towna yearly disease, and our cue ...

Haven't written anything for a few months so its probably awful. But thats where you come in right? Unbalanced~Chemistry in springtime, slatted sunlight steaming through the classroom blindsAnd clouds

Haven't been on here in old poem of poem edited slightly for a competition, Just need to get some feedback, what could be done better etc.Peeling DreamsLazy summer hazeinfects the ...

Haven't written anything in a while so this is kind of a return for me and its pretty much a splish-splash of emotion so don't be afraid to tear it ...

Experimental poem and I haven't written a poem in ages, so please review and tell me how to improve in writing this style of poem.Old InkStale urine and coffee and ...