Gwenevire

You repeat things to much... There are a few things you need to clear up. Other than that good work! :D

Well you don't have to show this to your teacher. Maybe you could edit it a little more.

I am so sorry... But that was not very good. Well it lost my attention by the second paragraph and all your descriptions are choppy and they don't really flow. ...

Keep on writing! :D

I love it! I think you should try to read it out laud to yourself and maybe you could smooth out some of the bumps. I think its very interesting. ...

It nice. But as you said it has limited description. Witch is nice. But I think it could do with some more :D

Very nice work! I really like it!

Really? Aw that makes me feel all warm and fuzzy on the inside! Thank you :D I really like where you are going with the story. I look forwards to ...

I am not done yet! :( So don't crit till I give you the heads up! Try my other 2 chapters! :D

Thanks.

Grate work! I really like that type of poetry... It flows well! -Cheers! Genevieve xxx

Nice work!

Wow. Very nice work! I think I know exactly how you feel :D -Keep writing Genevieve xxx

I totally agree with you! :P

M'kay... Thanks :D