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Re: My Untitled Piece of Work #1
You repeat things to much... There are a few things you need to clear up. Other than that good work! :D
Sat Dec 01, 2007 3:39 am -
Re: My English project--Akeelah and the Bee
Well you don't have to show this to your teacher. Maybe you could edit it a little more.
Sat Dec 01, 2007 3:36 am -
Re: Alone
I am so sorry... But that was not very good. Well it lost my attention by the second paragraph and all your descriptions are choppy and they don't really flow. ...
Sat Dec 01, 2007 3:35 am -
Re: Ayra's attempt at poetry- Nameless
Keep on writing! :D
Sat Dec 01, 2007 3:30 am -
Re: City of Ashes
I love it! I think you should try to read it out laud to yourself and maybe you could smooth out some of the bumps. I think its very interesting. ...
Sat Dec 01, 2007 3:29 am -
Re: My English project--Akeelah and the Bee
It nice. But as you said it has limited description. Witch is nice. But I think it could do with some more :D
Sat Dec 01, 2007 3:25 am -
Re: Ayra's attempt at poetry- Nameless
Very nice work! I really like it!
Sat Dec 01, 2007 3:24 am -
Re: A wolf and his girl chapter 4
Really? Aw that makes me feel all warm and fuzzy on the inside! Thank you :D I really like where you are going with the story. I look forwards to ...
Sat Dec 01, 2007 3:13 am -
Re: Moonlight Sea Gull: Chapter 3
I am not done yet! :( So don't crit till I give you the heads up! Try my other 2 chapters! :D
Sat Dec 01, 2007 3:08 am -
Re: .:The Wind:.
Thanks.
Sat Dec 01, 2007 3:06 am -
Re: The Prophecy of Dark Circle
Grate work! I really like that type of poetry... It flows well! -Cheers! Genevieve xxx
Fri Nov 30, 2007 5:35 pm -
Re: Love
Nice work!
Fri Nov 30, 2007 5:31 pm -
Re: They didn't know
Wow. Very nice work! I think I know exactly how you feel :D -Keep writing Genevieve xxx
Fri Nov 30, 2007 5:30 pm -
Re: Under The Wooden Floor
I totally agree with you! :P
Thu Nov 29, 2007 9:58 pm -
Re: Crushed
M'kay... Thanks :D
Thu Nov 29, 2007 9:57 pm